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Star-crossed and in perpetual orbit:
the Moon circling
the Earth circling
the Sun—your heart
beating
the rhythm of my soul.
Enter
the cruel eclipse:
spouses,
children!
(yours, mine
never ours).
Still,
this relentless and
unchangeable love,
our secret conflagration,
longs to burn
out loud.
This poem just burns with the relentless love it speaks of. Great writing!
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Thanks so much, Jade. Really appreciate it! 🙂
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smoldering!
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Thank you! 🙂
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I fear even love can be cruel at times.. poignant write!
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Nice lines describing a relationship: “(yours, mine
never ours).”
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Thank you, Frank. Much appreciated!
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The way you combine the cruel with eclipse make me think of the way the light of a love can be murdered by shadows.
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I like that a lot, Bjorn. The light of a love being murdered by shadows. It certainly can happen! Thank you for sharing your insights! 🙂
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I like how you used eclipse to describe the things that get in the way in life. Nicely done.
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Thank you, Arcadia Maria. I appreciate your dropping by & commenting. 🙂
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The circling of heavenly bodies, the pull of gravity, the care for offspring… it’s a puzzle. Nice poem Susan, full of weight and measure.
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Thank you, Lona. I like your take on my poem. 🙂
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I like the changed from heavenly objects to the life back in earth, our reality. I hope the journey together yield fruits that all parties can enjoy.
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Thanks so much, Grace. I hope so too.
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Yes, definitely reality here with the unrelenting nature of close relationships and an eclipse! Great poem..
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Thank you, NavasolaNature! 🙂
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