It’s Open Link Night at the dVerse Poets Pub!
Look at me and smile
that smile; make my heart beat like
velvet jackhammers
again and whisper
my name like it is holy.
Feed the obsession.

It’s Open Link Night at the dVerse Poets Pub!
Look at me and smile
that smile; make my heart beat like
velvet jackhammers
again and whisper
my name like it is holy.
Feed the obsession.
The line breaks in are spot on. They add so much to the words.
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Thank you, Jane! ๐
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Great duo of haiku! The picture is wonderful too! ๐
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Thank you, Vashti!
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velvet jackhammers – soft blows that cause internal damage
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Or internal glow I think rather
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Hey, good point! I hadn’t thought of that, but that is exactly what happens! Thank you Gina.
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So passionate Susan… ๐
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Thank you, Rob!
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Very nice ending.
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Thank you, Frank!
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Velvet jackhammers… brilliant.
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Thanks, Bjorn…unless you are being facetious. ๐
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Oh my, I like the contrast of velvet with the strength of jackhammers… softening each beat.
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Thank you, Mish. I appreciate your comments! ๐
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What can I say, not much when left a tad breathless, ๐ this. My sweetie has asked what I want for Christmas, I think I will use this poem as my wish list, sadly though, she says Santa has me on the mostly naughty list. Wonderful writing Susan!
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Thank you, Lona! You’ve just given me one of the nicest compliments ever. I am honored and I hope you get exactly what you want from “Santa.”
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Hoping ๐๐ปโโ๏ธ
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