Sunshine Sings
It’s open link night over at the dVerse Poets’ Pub!
I’ve not seen it,
but the damp-dirt fragrance
of petrichor (that musky mystique!)
dazzles my blind mind’s eye.
Rain’s shimmer—an almost-sound—
splash-dancing thirsty lawns,
razored lightening slicing;
silencing
Thunder’s echoed moans
then,
Sunshine sings a bow of rain
in colors I can hear.
Vernon, CT
Nice use of senses –
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Thanks, V.J. 🙂
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Very nice! Sounds like the early afternoon in the rainforest!
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🙂
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This is beyond gorgeous, and I LOVE the scent of petrichor!
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Thanks, Leslie. I too like petrichor. It’s beyond me why they don’t make a perfume of it.
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Seriously, I’d love to wear it–and probably would not be allergic, since it would be natural. There you go–a side career for you to pursue 🙂 ❤
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I wonder how to go about making it…
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I don’t know–but you’re pretty brilliant, so it may come to you!! 🙂
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{blush!} Thank you for saying so, but I don’t feel so brilliant. I am going to try and figure out (or find!) petrichor perfume.
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Oh good, perhaps I’ve inspired you–will email later, thank you 🙂
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This is so atmospheric, Susan, and had me sniffing the air for the musky mystique of petrichor! I also love the;
‘Rain’s shimmer—an almost-sound—
splash-dancing thirsty lawns’
and those wonderful final lines..
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I love the synaesthesia in this… the shimmer a sound, and listening to colors of the rainbow.
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Thanks, Bjorn. I love the word synesthesia, too. 🙂 Actually used it in a story once.
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Excellent alliteration here. It’s a natural fit.
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Thank you, rivrvlogr. 🙂
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You have deceptively simple lines that have greater impact than a soliloquy. That first line is an attention thief…and my favorite. It says nothing and everything.
“I’ve not seen it”
“Seen what?” I think. And the rest does not disappoint.
Rain’s shimmer being an almost sound? Absolutely genius! My mind imagined in high definition. My skin pebbles with cool, refreshing liquid kisses. But my ears… my ears are what you tickled most with that description. I wish to keep it and cradle it. That is when I know I have thoroughly enjoyed your thoughts. Thank you.
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Thank you for such a thoughtful comment. I am so very glad you liked this epiece. 🙂
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Oh such a stunning close to this one, Susan! ❤️
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Nice line putting sound in that rainbow: “Sunshine sings a bow of rain”
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I really like the rhythm of this (k)
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Thank you so much! I’m glad you stopped by.
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I agree with Bjorn, the synesthesia is marvelous
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