Submerged
Heeding Haiku With Chèvrefeuille, September 12th 2018 “unfinished”
“… challenge you this week to create the third, missing, line and than write a haibun with that completed haiku in it. Your haibun may have a maximum of 150 words (including the completed haiku).
Here is that unfinished haiku:”
missing a wife
the bamboo grass dives under —
submerged in mourning.
The aspect of mourning fits the unfinished haiku so well!
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Thank you! I accidentally finished the wrong Haiku, though. Ooops!
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No, you didn’t.
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Oh! I see what you mean! It reads well though!
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Thanks, petrujviljoen!
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It is interesting to see where you went.
We were on similar thoughts.
I created a sort of story without a haibun.
Cheers, Jules
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Sorry Icon does not go to current open site.
Here is the link:
single again
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Thanks, Jules. Our minds were in sync for sure!
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A very nice last line. Makes the feeling of missing very strong. Thank you for sharing.
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Thank you, Chev. Much appreciated!
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