Trois-par-Huit
It’s the Saturday Mix – Lucky Dip at MindLoveMisery’s Menagerie. Today we are tasked with creating a Trois-par-Huit.
Trois-par-Huit (Three-by-Eight or Octa-Tri for short), a poem containing three stanzas of 3, 3 and 2 lines OR 3, 2 and 3 lines: 8 lines total with a syllable count of 3, 6, 9, 12, 12, 9, 6, 3. The rhyming pattern is AAB BBC CC where the last line is the title of the poem and summarizes the meaning of the poem. *Note: These poems are to appear center aligned.
You and me
Some say it’s meant to be
Flames to a moth: A Phoenix rising from ashes
There’s been too many near misses, burns and crashes
Hot tears cling to our eyelashes
It’s time we ceased to be
You and me.
I really like the force in this. The violence in the ‘burns’, ‘crashes’, ‘flames’ and’ hot tears ‘- tells us that this is relationship isn’t meant to be.
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Great! I got it right. That’s what I was trying to convey. Thanks so much Vivian.
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My pleasure 😇
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Intense and beautiful! I like the first and last line being the same, while the meaning has changed.
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Thank you, Reena!
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Such a great use of the structure to completely flip the meaning. Well done!
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Thank you so much, weejars! Thank you for stopping by.
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kaykuala
There’s been too many near misses, burns and crashes
Hot tears cling to our eyelashes
Great shot Susan. Smoothly rendered Unlucky relationship it was!
Hank
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Thank you mhmp77. Much appreciated!
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